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Post by Markus E. Reeves on May 11, 2008 17:35:42 GMT -6
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Lord Dominicus
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Post by Lord Dominicus on Sept 16, 2008 8:33:44 GMT -6
**** YES! THE RETURN OF THE GOOD MARK EVIL!
Actually I have to say man, although wonderfully over the top (which goes perfectly with your character) it was probably one of the best rps I have read of yours. Lots of examples of insanity, great darkness lines, and wicked guitar solos. What else could one ask for?
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Post by doc on Sept 22, 2008 10:37:26 GMT -6
What else could one ask for? Free porn
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Post by doc on Sept 23, 2008 1:02:31 GMT -6
On a serious note, I just read your last rp. Your content has improved from the XHF days, but what you need to do now is work on the grammar and vocab side a little more to really improve, IMO. Read over your rp and say it out loud and then tweak the sentence structure till it sounds a little better. At the moment it is very hardcore-harry esque but harrys came with overwhelming charisma. Another little thing is you seem to repeat the same word/point a few times in a paragraph and it can sound repetitive. Again, just read it out loud and you'll hear when it doesn't sound great and make edits where necessary...I think you're getting there though, keep it up.
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Lord Dominicus
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Post by Lord Dominicus on Sept 23, 2008 7:58:10 GMT -6
Grammer mistakes? What are you talking about Doc? From a "read aloud" point of view it was just fine. Though Mark, that is very good advice (reading things out loud).
I really liked the RP, you centered in on Marks violent side, and his lust for pain. You also totally knocked down that new revolution stable before it started, which is AWESOME- aaaand you tied it into your match, which is very smart, as Evil's bread and butter are Xtreme matches.
One thing I would note on is Mark's use of current events to denote things. I don't really see Mark Evil as a "sit down and watch TV about politics then turn on the game" sort of guy. I see him as a "Eat a puppy then show little children pictures of said puppy eating" sort of guy. But then again, what do I know?
So true, so true.
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Post by doc on Sept 23, 2008 10:12:32 GMT -6
I never said he made any grammar mistakes once, I was referring to the fact that improving on his sentence structure, vocubalary and general control of the English language will bring on his RPs a lot.
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Lord Dominicus
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Post by Lord Dominicus on Sept 23, 2008 10:18:27 GMT -6
Ah, I see I see.
But for mentioning grammer when it was fine....WE MUST KUNG-FU FIGHT!
But anyway, you do give good advice.
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Post by Markus E. Reeves on Sept 29, 2008 23:25:03 GMT -6
New promo up called Atrum Sanctus
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Post by Philip Burns on Sept 29, 2008 23:56:42 GMT -6
what the hell
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Post by Angel on Oct 4, 2008 23:55:15 GMT -6
Screw everyone else, continue being different! I liked it.
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Post by Markus E. Reeves on Jan 9, 2009 19:24:40 GMT -6
New Mark Evil rp is up.
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Lord Dominicus
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Post by Lord Dominicus on Jan 17, 2009 5:35:41 GMT -6
I love Mark Evil's insistance on being bad-ass when being bad-ass is nearly impossible. Yet somehow, he does it. Beautiful.
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Post by Markus E. Reeves on Jan 17, 2009 11:42:31 GMT -6
2 new rps are up. one from last night and one from this morning
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Post by Maniac on Jan 17, 2009 14:15:59 GMT -6
Good job this week. Keep it up.
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Post by Markus E. Reeves on Jan 23, 2009 20:18:58 GMT -6
New RP is up. Cashing In is now up for your reading enjoyment
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Post by msjsn3 on Jan 23, 2009 21:06:41 GMT -6
Nice rp. Enjoyed reading it
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Post by Maniac on Jan 26, 2009 22:32:06 GMT -6
I love this new direction of Evil, run with it man, its gold.
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Post by Markus E. Reeves on Jan 30, 2009 12:39:41 GMT -6
Bigger Fish to Fry is now up for your feedback enjoyment
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Post by Maniac on Jan 31, 2009 18:24:15 GMT -6
Dude, keep pumping out the awesome.
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Post by msjsn3 on Jan 31, 2009 18:43:37 GMT -6
I like the direction that you are taking Mark Evil in.
Keep up the good work
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Post by Markus E. Reeves on Feb 7, 2009 20:02:34 GMT -6
Laissez Les Bon Temps Roulez
Is now up for your viewing pleasure.
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Post by Maniac on Feb 8, 2009 16:58:55 GMT -6
It is about time Mark Evil stepped up and became the kick ass evil son of a B he should be.
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Post by Markus E. Reeves on Feb 14, 2009 17:57:58 GMT -6
Blood, Sweat and Barbed Wire Part 1 is up.
I'm On a Boat is now up for your reading pleasure.
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Post by Maniac on Feb 15, 2009 10:12:27 GMT -6
Mark Evil > God
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Post by Philip Burns on Feb 15, 2009 14:29:53 GMT -6
I dont get it, maybe I am missing something but we keep getting these demonic messages and declarations about doing gruesome things and then theres a comedy bit...
Its was funny and good though. more than i can say for some jerks around here. Im looking at you Burns!! Wait, what?
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Post by adm on Feb 15, 2009 14:42:14 GMT -6
Uh...wtf. Where were these rps when you faced me, Evil? Where were these when you were in XHF? I didn't know you could do something like this...seriously.
Great job, but I do agree with the confusion Burns had. Demonic then comedy? You aint Tarantino...you can't do that unless the comedy is the same kind of comedy you'd get from a demonic possesed person. I suggest watching Dusk till Dawn or Pulp Fiction, both have some interesting ideas for you. Yes...film for reference for rps...OMG!
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Post by Markus E. Reeves on Feb 24, 2009 15:01:53 GMT -6
Drunk and Stupid in America (Pt. 1)
Is now up for your reading pleasure
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Post by Maniac on Mar 1, 2009 14:00:20 GMT -6
Stop being awesome, now.
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Post by adm on Mar 1, 2009 14:03:18 GMT -6
Yeah, stop being awesome, Evil. You are scaring us into thinking you may...just...actually...win the title
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Post by Maniac on Mar 1, 2009 14:14:39 GMT -6
He will, one way or the other.
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