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Post by Chris Cobain on Nov 23, 2009 20:51:41 GMT -6
Just posted my rp and really interested in your guys opinion as its been a while since my last rp so I had to dust off the cob webs.
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Post by Seth Evans on Nov 25, 2009 11:39:47 GMT -6
I like your RPs, but things are different here than they were over in the other place.
I don't know if an admin wants to point that out, but I thought I would.
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Post by Maniac on Nov 25, 2009 22:33:43 GMT -6
Graff is correct, nCw doesn't generally do in ring promos, unless of course you wanna send in a segment for the show. Aside from that I enjoy your stuff.
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Post by Chris Cobain on Nov 27, 2009 15:23:17 GMT -6
2nd and last rp posted for my match, Try to change scenery moving away from In Ring. Now I know, so what do you guys think?
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Post by adm on Dec 5, 2009 20:57:16 GMT -6
Fix some grammar errors...it'll be better. MUCH better...I lost some of your point on the 2nd rp due to lines like this: Mexico I despise on the soul fact that it looks at the USA in such a high lighting.
hate to be the resident Nazi, but I can point out at least 4-5 errors in that sentence alone. A lot of the rest of the rp was like this, you have good points that get lost in the mud of things like this.
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Post by Maniac on Dec 6, 2009 17:52:20 GMT -6
Re-read or spell check your rps, find those grammar mistakes, and you'd be golden. I loved your stuff in XHF but the last rp you did, some parts were a little difficult to read and understand. Outside of that, I like the character and what he's trying to accomplish and the way he is completely unbending in his point of view.
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Post by Chris Cobain on Dec 11, 2009 19:14:53 GMT -6
Well believe it or not, I took a serious attempt at Development Rp. May try it out for a while, what you guys think.
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Post by Shane Hunt on Dec 12, 2009 7:04:18 GMT -6
I love your characters and their gimmicks. The only thing that messes with your RP quality is punctuation. You sometimes use commas and full stops when they aren't needed, and other times you put full stops instead of commas or vice versa. Apart from punctuation, your RPs are great.
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Post by Chris Cobain on Jan 12, 2010 22:44:40 GMT -6
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Post by adm on Jan 12, 2010 23:06:40 GMT -6
you have a very trash-talk style in this one. I liked it. There was some funny lines in there. Good job.
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Post by Spike Kane on Jan 13, 2010 3:37:49 GMT -6
Not a bad rp amigo. I like the straight up promo style of this one (not that I don't like CD) there were a few times I had to re-read something because it didn't make sense due to some slight mistakes but overall it was a pretty good rp and an interesting read.
Keep it up.
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Post by Chris Cobain on Jan 26, 2010 21:25:34 GMT -6
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Post by Shane Hunt on Jan 27, 2010 5:16:14 GMT -6
Good RP. I had to go over a few bits twice because first time round I didn't quite understand them, but all in all the RP was good quality. I don't usually like seeing pictures in RPs, but you'd already described the wrestling school earlier in the RP so it didn't harm the RP at all.
On a non-related matter, I think if you curved the word "Cobain" at the bottom of your banner, it'd look that little bit better. Not saying it doesn't look good now. I just think that'd perfect it.
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Post by Atreyu on Jan 27, 2010 6:15:29 GMT -6
Not bad at all sir, some mistakes as usual but I can overlook them. I think you need to take your time a little more, slow and down and re-read your rps once they're done. You're making the same mistakes as you were a few weeks ago.
Listen to the feedback people give, otherwise there's no point in posting. Fix the mistakes and you're on your way.
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