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Post by Donovan Hale on Dec 27, 2009 11:03:47 GMT -6
First post is up in Developmental RPs! tell me what you think, but don't be to critical...I'm fragile...LOL
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Post by adm on Dec 27, 2009 11:41:37 GMT -6
other than the blinding color scheme of the text it wasn't a bad intro rp. We should get you into a match with someone who can help you figure out the character in a match-rp setting a bit better. Though I still like the idea of Hale being a bit more strong and silent type while his woman does more of the talking. Sorta like Jimmy hart did for a lot of the people he managed back in the day.
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Post by Cliff Clinton on Dec 27, 2009 12:43:05 GMT -6
Not bad at all Kit.
I think your alot better than you give yourself credit for.
And its only going to come out more and more as time goes by.
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Post by Donovan Hale on Dec 31, 2009 3:38:27 GMT -6
first 'official' RP posted for Trauma!
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Post by Ayla St. James on Dec 31, 2009 4:04:16 GMT -6
You gain five cool points for saying.. "I'll gut you like a fish"
Keep it up.
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Post by adm on Dec 31, 2009 11:14:02 GMT -6
I really enjoyed it, looks like you got this "rping as a man" thing figured out if you can keep up the rebellion vs authority (the manager and they status quo of talking) up. Because that really seems to fit this character, a quieter guy being forced to be loud...he'll become frustrated, angry, lash out...hopefully at his opponents.
Great job. You don't give yourself enough credit for your descriptions, I kinda geek gasmed at the "nails ripping into flesh" line...really lets you know how hard she's balling her hands up.
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Post by Cliff Clinton on Dec 31, 2009 11:23:08 GMT -6
Yeah I really liked the nails ripping into flesh line too.
You the WOman!
and Donny is the man!
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Post by Donovan Hale on Jan 2, 2010 8:05:53 GMT -6
Second RP for Trauma up!
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Post by adm on Jan 2, 2010 11:17:00 GMT -6
Dunno if you need the pictures for every rp, your words seem to give a pretty good description of the scene as is, but if you wanted to, using smaller images might be helpful as they take up a bit of room.
Other than that, it was another very good rp, Kit. The only thing I could really say to improve will probably come as you get opponents that allow you to say a little bit more. Good job this week.
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