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Post by Paul Star on Feb 16, 2011 20:18:19 GMT -6
Would love some feedback about my latest RP please.
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Post by Paul Star on Mar 3, 2011 12:56:34 GMT -6
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Post by Deleted on Mar 3, 2011 16:19:27 GMT -6
I enjoyed it, easy to read and flows fairly well. Gets across the arrogance/cockiness/self-assured nature of your character and is a decent set up to a match, gets across the old vs new element to it too.
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Post by Paul Star on Mar 7, 2011 17:44:51 GMT -6
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Post by Deleted on Mar 7, 2011 19:50:50 GMT -6
I can't really fault it for a first RP in a week that allows 3, it gets a decent amount of trash talking in without going over the top, more subtle insults than profanity etc.
I didn't spot any major spelling calamities and it flowed well. All in all sets up for an interesting week where I suspect we will hear a lot more from you.
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Post by Todd Williams on Mar 9, 2011 13:04:26 GMT -6
It's really a good rp Paul, love the history you brought up, and you seem to be a man who is determined to go at again with Todd Williams. I love the way you acknowledge that IM TODD WILLIAMS stuff that was pretty funny. This should be a really good match, and may the best man win. It's gonna be fun to rp with you buddy.
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Post by Paul Star on Mar 9, 2011 17:36:50 GMT -6
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Post by Deleted on Mar 9, 2011 17:40:22 GMT -6
I enjoyed the RP, I liked where you went with the "Hall of Mirrors" thought it was very inventive! That and you were playing Guitar Hero which is always a thumbs up. Although In reality I suck at but no matter!
Thought it was a good reply to Todd's RP, will be interesting to see what he does for his reply and then your third and final RPs together.
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Post by Todd Williams on Mar 10, 2011 1:44:12 GMT -6
Your second one was really good i loved how you bounced off my first one. I love the fact were giving each other so much material to work with. It makes for a really good feud and I am happy to be working with you.
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Post by Paul Star on Mar 10, 2011 5:55:15 GMT -6
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Post by Todd Williams on Mar 10, 2011 12:19:31 GMT -6
Simply awesome mate, this feud has been so fun, and you are one of the best guys to work with. We were able to bring the best out of each other and more importantly just have a fun overall good time with our feud. May the best man win.
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Post by Deleted on Mar 10, 2011 12:39:15 GMT -6
Good final RP, concluded everything nicely and as I was saying I am looking forward to your match. It has been set up very nicely and I honestly couldn't pick a winner, it will be a very interesting match.
Look forward to more of the same next week!
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Post by Paul Star on Mar 15, 2011 18:29:49 GMT -6
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Post by Deleted on Mar 15, 2011 19:55:05 GMT -6
Once again, good RP. I enjoyed the interaction between the two and your dialogue was very entertaining to read.
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Post by Steph Sanderson on Mar 17, 2011 8:55:21 GMT -6
Really well written rp you have there. Love the respect you hold for Todd really good sign of a face respect to another face. The look back at the match with Jacobsen was a really nice touch. That math is shaping up to be something good. It will be good to see if Paul an come out on top.
Kapow!!!! LOL
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Post by Demetrious Young on Mar 18, 2011 4:36:56 GMT -6
I have finally got a chance to read an RP of yours and get to leave you some feedback. I really enjoy your style and what you bring to nCw, I wouldn't mind facing you one day. The way you managed to pull off the face/face match was very nicely done.
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Post by Paul Star on Mar 18, 2011 19:41:00 GMT -6
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Post by Deleted on Mar 18, 2011 20:08:44 GMT -6
I enjoyed it Paul, again the dialogue is good as are the descriptive elements.
Really enjoy you RPs, always fun to read. The fortune teller aspect was an interesting inclusion.
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Post by Paul Star on Mar 24, 2011 19:08:43 GMT -6
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Post by Deleted on Mar 25, 2011 10:30:43 GMT -6
Another good RP Paul, gauged a genuine excitement from Star to be in the ring with the two champions and it is clear at the same time you won't be a "bit part". Similar to the Miz with the Rock/Cena feud, forcing your way in only a little bit differently obviously.
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Post by Paul Star on Mar 31, 2011 17:50:30 GMT -6
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Post by Deleted on Mar 31, 2011 20:52:58 GMT -6
Another good RP Paul, good to see Paul isn;t dwelling too much about what happened in his last match.
Was a very enjoyable read as always, hopefully Paul keep on going forward especially now he is one of the men inside the Colliseum!
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Post by Paul Star on Apr 9, 2011 18:13:41 GMT -6
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Post by Deleted on Apr 9, 2011 18:49:10 GMT -6
Good RP this week Paul, top work. You have had a good pop at just about everybody you needed to!
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Post by Paul Star on Apr 12, 2011 18:25:45 GMT -6
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Post by Paul Star on Apr 15, 2011 6:25:36 GMT -6
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Post by Paul Star on Apr 17, 2011 16:23:47 GMT -6
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Post by Deleted on Apr 18, 2011 6:48:58 GMT -6
I think you did very well this week Paul, and it very nearly paid off at Sovereign but either way I think pretty much every single man comes out of that match with a whole lot of prestige and a huge amount of material for the next few weeks.
Anyways, onto your RPs for the PPV. As usual they were very good, well paced and well written and I certainly don't see any glaring issues with them that are hindering you massively or anything like that, Paul in my eyes in the classic face that goes back and forth between victory and defeat and gets so close to things and one day is just going to grabs the bulls by both horns and pull out a really memorable nCw moment and win some prestigeous titles so don't be downhearted.
I liked the road trip, I really enjoy the way your characters work together and in all honesty my only criticism is that Paul is too nice at times! But then he is a face, so that isn't even a problem! I suspect down the line we may see a more "gritty" Star though, which would be a very interesting twist to your style but I think you'd pull it off.
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