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Post by Jack Wilde on Jan 20, 2010 12:45:12 GMT -6
Title says it all.
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Post by Emma English on Jan 20, 2010 17:15:37 GMT -6
It wasn't bad for your first RP. If you expand on things like the stuff around the characters and such it will give the reader a better idea of the scene where they are, and why they are there. I mean we all know that they were there to see Mr. Fox, but give more description. It really adds to an RP.
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Post by Will Washington on Jan 20, 2010 21:05:55 GMT -6
Hey, change the title of this to your character's name feedback. Then you'll get all your feedback in this one thread instead of a bunch of different ones.
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Post by Cyrus Daniels on Feb 3, 2010 13:25:31 GMT -6
ok i'll be honest - that rp was terrible and appeared rushed, BUT I think you can make the gimmick work if you turn the character deliberately into a parody of real wrestlers, to me that would be amusing and different and give you a wide range of things for your character to do and with legitimate reason, unlike now where it just feels you ripped off catchphrases for the hell of it...
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Post by Jack Wilde on Feb 4, 2010 12:52:12 GMT -6
New RP up , I think the character parody thingy got wrong , so I made another one.
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Post by Ayla St. James on Feb 4, 2010 17:56:39 GMT -6
Well, the nerd thing has potential.. but right now it just seems forced. Like you tried to do that rp as fast as possible. The WoW thing was quite funny, but it ended before it really went anywhere. I have to agree with everyone else. You need to expand on the character's thoughts about wrestling.
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