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Post by Daniel S. Hunter on Jun 16, 2010 14:26:12 GMT -6
First Rp is up
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Brad Kane
Junior Member
...::What I Get::...
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Post by Brad Kane on Jun 16, 2010 15:39:26 GMT -6
"In my first match I am teamed up with a former World Champion in Xavier Cross"
Uh, bruh, you're teaming with Xavier Williams. Other then that slight moment, it wasn't bad. Though the whole bragging about his past at once like could've been handled over numerous RPs like looking at school pictures and what have you. I dunno man, you just need to stick with a character at some point and flow with it. Maybe it's this one, I don't know. Only you do. But your first offering wasn't too bad.
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Post by Zelda Knite on Jun 17, 2010 8:16:15 GMT -6
I thought it was probably the best RP you've done in a while. I hope the character sticks.
Constructive advice: Maybe use a bit more character interaction, and maybe flesh him out more as a character.
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Post by Daniel S. Hunter on Jun 26, 2010 1:48:01 GMT -6
New rp is up. like to hear your thoughts
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Post by Daniel S. Hunter on Jul 2, 2010 18:27:34 GMT -6
New Rp is up called The Lone Wolf (Part 1)
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Post by Daniel S. Hunter on Jul 3, 2010 11:39:58 GMT -6
Newer RP is up
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