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Hugo
Sept 1, 2010 23:52:56 GMT -6
Post by Hugo Conway on Sept 1, 2010 23:52:56 GMT -6
Anyone have comments on my debut?
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Hugo
Sept 2, 2010 0:58:23 GMT -6
Post by Jason Blair on Sept 2, 2010 0:58:23 GMT -6
You're a better writer than you gave yourself credit for. Opening scene was very well done. When I read your app I didn't like your character at all, but your rp has me intrigued.
I'd tell you to spend more time on your opponent, but that can be difficult to do against Hexx.
You used "to" instead of "too" a few times. Yeah, I'm being a grammar nazi.
Overall it's good stuff though.
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Hugo
Sept 2, 2010 9:54:16 GMT -6
Post by Hugo Conway on Sept 2, 2010 9:54:16 GMT -6
Thanks, and I hoped to do more on Hexx but when I was writing I couldn't find his bio. Will be fixed in the future.
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Hugo
Sept 6, 2010 17:09:09 GMT -6
Post by Alex Jones on Sept 6, 2010 17:09:09 GMT -6
hexx is in developmental talent...he's used to put new guys over
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Drake Tyson
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Hugo
Sept 6, 2010 23:30:57 GMT -6
Post by Drake Tyson on Sept 6, 2010 23:30:57 GMT -6
Wow bro. You're a lot better than you gave yourself credit for. I'm impressed. Keep up the good work.
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Hugo
Sept 7, 2010 0:44:54 GMT -6
Post by Hugo Conway on Sept 7, 2010 0:44:54 GMT -6
Thanks, I have always been told I was a bad writer....
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Hugo
Sept 7, 2010 20:31:29 GMT -6
Post by Alex Jones on Sept 7, 2010 20:31:29 GMT -6
write what feels god foryou bro..I enjoyed this rp..much better than the first but you had something to work with which helps alot....
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Hugo
Nov 29, 2010 0:09:07 GMT -6
Post by Hugo Conway on Nov 29, 2010 0:09:07 GMT -6
So I put a whole 3 up for the breaking away ppv any thoughts? I am trying t get better here peeps.
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Hugo
Nov 29, 2010 0:39:24 GMT -6
Post by Louis Leblanc on Nov 29, 2010 0:39:24 GMT -6
You definitely are getting better, whether you realize it or not. I respect the character development that has grown since you came in. I don't consider myself to be a "great" Rp'er, so I don't know how qualified I am to give you advice...
I'm much more intrigued by the "leaving the skating life behind and becoming a wrestler" storyline than I am with the "congenital heart disease" aspect. I'm not sure whether it's the story itself or how it's being presented. That being said, I definitely still enjoy reading those parts of the RP. I'm not and I wouldn't suggest getting rid of it.
All I can tell you is keep on truckin'. You and Rags put on one of those matches where it was unfortunate that someone had to lose.
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Hugo
Dec 2, 2010 3:24:28 GMT -6
Post by Hugo Conway on Dec 2, 2010 3:24:28 GMT -6
Looking to add some spice to the mix. Create some tension between Dutch and Hugo-test that relationship. More to come. Hugo wont become a full on heel but now there will be a struggle to hold on to the carelessness/innocents
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