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Post by Nathan Webb on May 24, 2011 23:35:31 GMT -6
Feedback for the Cold Spider
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Post by Nathan Webb on May 24, 2011 23:36:08 GMT -6
Posted my first RP for NCW - Arguing with Myselves - Hope you all enjoy
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Post by Drake Tyson on May 25, 2011 0:57:15 GMT -6
I've heard of you from Shaun's fed, so I had to take the opportunity to read some of your work. Great first RP kiddo. You introduced the character solidly and gave us a little insight into him. You can't do much better for a debut RP and I'm looking forward to the upward climb from here.
The only things I'd say to work on would be setting the stage a little more. Fleshing out the surroundings and the mood a bit and setting the tone for what's to come. Having three different mindsets talking to each other can be a little hard to follow, so maybe show how the physical embodiment of the man Nathan Webb is reacting and expressing himself during these inner conversations. It's a bit of a complicated concept, so descriptions can go a long way. The only other thing is discussing the opponent a little more. I'm sure you'll do it more as you get involved and learn more about the characters here in nCw, so I'm not worried about it at all.
You're going to great here and I'm happy to see you joined up. Hopefully you have a long and successful run.
(BTW: This is Deez, so direct all angry comments towards me in the cbox.)
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Post by Nathan Webb on May 25, 2011 8:46:38 GMT -6
Cool thanks for the feedback, I appreciate the constructive criticism.
I do have to make a slight response though. I do try to set up the RPs usually but this one was hard to set up. Also I usually like to have the reader's infer things from the story and get their own interpretation/paint their own visual instead of shove things down people's throats. Again thank you for opinion and hope to give you more great RPs to come.
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Post by Nathan Webb on Jun 4, 2011 22:37:22 GMT -6
First off, I apologize that my RP was sooooo late. This week was nearly horrible for me writing. Also I hope you enjoy what I put on there if not constructive feed back is always welcome.
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Post by Nathan Webb on Jun 16, 2011 20:44:00 GMT -6
New RP up, hope you all enjoy. Criticism is always welcome
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Post by Nathan Webb on Jun 24, 2011 0:08:37 GMT -6
PPV Rp posted I hope you all enjoy... and again feedback is always appreciated
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Post by Pooler on Jun 25, 2011 15:57:49 GMT -6
Great work dude! It's like old times again haha
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Post by Nathan Webb on Jul 15, 2011 0:14:18 GMT -6
New RP posted. Hope you all enjoy and feedback is always welcome.
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Post by Nathan Webb on Jul 22, 2011 0:28:15 GMT -6
New RP up hope you all enjoy.
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Post by Nathan Webb on Jul 23, 2011 15:11:12 GMT -6
2nd RP is up; feedback as always welcomed
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Post by Nathan Webb on Jul 27, 2011 11:50:32 GMT -6
First RP for the Pay per view up. Hope you all enjoy and feed my back if you want.
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Post by Deleted on Jul 28, 2011 19:37:08 GMT -6
I love the first person narration that you do with your RPs Nathan, it is effective and works really well.
You've made a good start this week, heres hoping for a good match!
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Post by Nathan Webb on Aug 3, 2011 12:49:12 GMT -6
1st RP for Trauma posted...hope you enjoy...and feel free to feed my back
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Post by Nathan Webb on Aug 13, 2011 13:22:46 GMT -6
2nd RP for this week up. Hope you all enjoy.
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Post by Nathan Webb on Aug 20, 2011 19:51:16 GMT -6
Rp up, Sorry I came in late with it this week, but stuff happened this week and it was definitely an off week with putting words to paper. Either way I hope you enjoy.
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Post by Nathan Webb on Aug 24, 2011 8:44:43 GMT -6
Posted my first ppv rp last night hope you all enjoy.
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Post by Deleted on Aug 25, 2011 14:48:43 GMT -6
Good work, your cold cuts are definately your stronger parts of your roleplays.
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Post by Nathan Webb on Oct 13, 2011 19:40:06 GMT -6
1st RP is posted I hope you all enjoy.
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Post by Nathan Webb on Nov 10, 2011 20:07:01 GMT -6
As you know I have been away from full time action I have been posting a series of Devo RPs. i should be back soon for competition while I sell this injury to Nate but in the meantime what do you think of these Developmental RP especially with me introducing a new character in Rose Acantha.
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Post by Nathan Webb on Nov 30, 2011 17:01:48 GMT -6
New RP up ...comment if you desire
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Post by Lionheart on Dec 1, 2011 3:47:39 GMT -6
Great job.. I hope you keep it up and stick around for the long term, I see a big future for you if you do
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Post by Nathan Webb on Dec 2, 2011 19:17:14 GMT -6
New RP hope you all enjoy
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Post by Nathan Webb on Dec 14, 2011 21:43:07 GMT -6
New RP posted with Shout outs to Verona and The Ace...Comment as you wish...Hope you all enjoy...
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Post by Nathan Webb on Jan 2, 2012 21:25:31 GMT -6
First RP posted for my match against Lex..hope you all enjoy...feedback is always welcome
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Post by Deleted on Jan 2, 2012 22:34:02 GMT -6
Interesting RP, looking forward to seeing where it goes.
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Post by Nathan Webb on Jan 27, 2012 20:54:52 GMT -6
New Nate RP ready for viewing...Hopefully you won't need a five hour energy to read it...
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Post by Nathan Webb on Feb 1, 2012 19:35:53 GMT -6
New RP posted...sorry about the length but got on a roll...hopefully there was no filler.
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Post by Nathan Webb on Feb 7, 2012 22:43:29 GMT -6
New RP posted hope you all enjoy...
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