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Post by twmslater on Sept 17, 2007 16:48:46 GMT -6
Eh, trying to do something different, and introduce a new person. Comments, criticism, stuff I should fix in the future, lemmie know. Thanks.
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Jack Manson
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It's the one that kills, not me!
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Post by Jack Manson on Sept 17, 2007 16:54:41 GMT -6
I enjoyed it. Was a nice change to see someone feeling hopeless and past it, instead of the usual self hyping roleplays we see week in week out.
Makes for interesting character development.
Only thing I didn't like was it wasn't very pleasing to the eye. Maybe add a bit of colour, or bold or italics. Can make the difference. Obviously it's not a big big deal but it helps break things down and is easier to read.
Other than that good job bud.
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