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Post by disdonn on Mar 25, 2010 1:51:55 GMT -6
Similar to what Will said...too damn long. You could have done almost every rp for the week with the material you put in this one, if you split it up and edited it right...easily could do 3 rps of about 1200 words each.
Also, because of said length, it dragged on. And mostly...because of the Tiger/Jesse James-type of Press Conference about a marriage scandal. It's nice to get a joke in about it...but...a full blown conference is best saved for CD boards or headlines or better yet, a segment on the show (which is live, of course) as opposed to in the rp.
What you had to say about us was really good, though I agree with Will, you got his character wrong (either by not knowing or by just trying to paint all patriots as dumb hicks, either way...didn't quite hit his char on the head so much).
It's ok, you have two more to do, just keep the length down and try not to talk about everyone...seriously, split us up a bit.
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Post by Ricky Johnson on Mar 26, 2010 5:37:50 GMT -6
"Case in Point" is up.
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Post by Leonard Fox on Mar 26, 2010 8:28:36 GMT -6
Call me crazy, but i liked the first one. It was long, but didn't feel long to me. I thought #2 was just as good.
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Post by Ricky Johnson on Aug 28, 2010 18:38:10 GMT -6
The "this should be in developmental" All grown up is up.
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Post by Ricky Johnson on Sept 16, 2010 2:13:15 GMT -6
"Proof" is done. And I'm too tired to proofread it.
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Post by Ricky Johnson on Sept 25, 2010 4:35:50 GMT -6
"No.." and "Memories" are done and I attempted to make myself cry when writing those, so I'd better get feedback... or not. Whatever.
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Post by Falcon on Sept 25, 2010 5:06:53 GMT -6
noooo.. not Roxi..
Anyway, it's no secret that we love you, and we're glad you're back.
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Post by Ricky Johnson on Oct 1, 2010 5:34:54 GMT -6
"Closure" is up. I might have even spelled that wrong.
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Post by Mike Honcho on Oct 1, 2010 6:57:35 GMT -6
I liked the dialog but it maybe could have used a little more meat but still pretty good. Solid as always. Good show ol boy.
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Post by Ricky Johnson on Oct 2, 2010 5:48:22 GMT -6
"Chances/A Beautiful Day" is up.
I think I added "A beautiful day" because I was listening to that song while writing and wanted to add it in. But I didn't. Because I'm lazy.
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