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Post by adm on Jul 23, 2009 14:27:32 GMT -6
Hey uh...here's some feedback for you: Funny stuff was funny but seriously, stop railing on Everyman...it's getting OLD...REALLY old. Stop drooling over Kendra Bates, it has no relation to your match, and you have NOT been endorsed by me to do so...so STOP! Also...you might want to think about doing that construction thing I told you to do...weeks ago...isn't that what he's using the PCH money for? His own construction crew so non-mexicans will fix **** in the US? Anyway, the stuff you said about Rob, etc etc was good, save the Joe Everyman stuff. Build up the non-Everyman ****, leave Kendra alone...and you'll be fine
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Post by Maniac on Jul 24, 2009 20:19:15 GMT -6
First, Rob's puppet was not black, it was a puppet of Angel from the tv show Angel.
Second, Shelly and Angel are back together, had you taken the time to properly research the match.
Aside from those two gapping holes in your rp, not bad... asshat.
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Post by Jabari Woodhead on Jul 31, 2009 21:21:44 GMT -6
Mr. Brewski says "Beer is Good" is up
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Post by Jabari Woodhead on Aug 1, 2009 13:45:03 GMT -6
Quick and too the Point...just like Stacey Johnson is now up
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Post by adm on Aug 1, 2009 13:52:40 GMT -6
I didn't like the first one much, there was just something missing...it didn't feel right.
The second, however seemed to, even if it came out a bit heelish at points, make up for it. I really liked some of the creative ways Fergus hit the nail on his opponent's heads. It works. Even if he comes off heelish, he was "drinking hard liquor" and quite a few people turn into dicks when they drink. so...it sorta makes sense. I also liked that you had some more descriptions in the 2nd that helped sell the "angry drunk".
2nd was pretty much gold the 1st is an example of what you need to avoid in the future. nuff said.
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Post by Jabari Woodhead on Aug 4, 2009 14:24:54 GMT -6
HOLY LONG ASS PROMO BATMAN! PPV RP #1 is now up for your pleasure
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Post by Jimmy Zane on Aug 4, 2009 14:35:11 GMT -6
ROFLMAO..... noice!
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Post by adm on Aug 4, 2009 14:55:09 GMT -6
Nice and funny, the ONLY thing I could say is selling the length thing with maybe a bit more "old age" to them would have been a bit more fun to see but...this was pretty good. You hit all the high points, and hopefully got enough to give him more to feed from...match wise.
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Post by Jabari Woodhead on Aug 8, 2009 13:00:54 GMT -6
Lost in Hollywood is up
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Post by Jabari Woodhead on Aug 14, 2009 16:18:08 GMT -6
The Brad Kane Problem is now up
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Post by adm on Aug 14, 2009 18:46:08 GMT -6
You went kinda heelish with this rp, though it was funny to see Fergus shooting on BK and his wife's porno, it's definitely done in such a way that could come off as heel.
Do another rp like this and I'll tell you to change what alignment Fergus is.
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Post by Jabari Woodhead on Aug 15, 2009 2:12:04 GMT -6
The Brad Kane Situation Pt. 2 is now up
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Post by adm on Aug 15, 2009 10:27:17 GMT -6
One word review of what was wrong: GRAMMAR!
Nuff said, the rest was good, pretty accurate if you researched BK's fed history far enough back.
He might be paying for his past mistakes for a while...
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Post by Joe Everyman on Oct 10, 2009 10:11:05 GMT -6
*After reading your RP* You're going to hell
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Post by Jabari Woodhead on Jan 22, 2010 13:44:25 GMT -6
New rp up since the update in character. I would like to hear what you guys think about it
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Post by Shane Hunt on Jan 28, 2010 17:32:47 GMT -6
I prefered your second PPV Rp. Your first was OK, but you were very vague on what Fergus was doing and where he was. At least in your second RP, you told us something about what Fergus was doing while he talked. What made you decide to only mention one of Fergus's opponents in your second RP? I think you could have at said something Jack Wilde, even it wasn't much.
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