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Post by Gabriel Karras on Jul 23, 2009 18:12:39 GMT -6
Alright, tell me what you think..
Not the worlds greatest I know, but I'm working on it.
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Post by adm on Jul 23, 2009 18:18:34 GMT -6
...indeed not the world's greatest but if you keep using religious quotes to antagonize your opponents like this it could be better than most attempts at this gimmick. Ok, here's things I think you can improve: Finding quotes, there's all sorts of more obscure and less literal translations in the bible you could use in the future. Confuse the ****ers, it serves em right not to be believers in the almighty god ALSO, the "bowing head and saying amen" is kinda redundant cuz, I dunno what church you're going to but if the preacher is like...praying...the whole congregation is already heads bowed and all they gotta do is say amen...or if they are catholic they gotta go to a knee, say amen, back to feet, etc etc.. Good things are in the future of this character...VERY good things.
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Post by Gabriel Karras on Jul 23, 2009 18:31:21 GMT -6
The Amen part was just a character break you nazi!
And there is no specific church involved...
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Post by Cyrus Daniels on Jul 24, 2009 3:30:39 GMT -6
I liked it, to me it had a very what Mordecai should have been feel to it, but as long as it doesn't turn into Reverend D-Von its all good, I'm particularly intrigued to learn more about how Disiree came to be given her intriguing back story, that alone should give you enough sin material to feed off of if you ever wanted a break from bible quotes, but yeah religion is all about interpreting the words and coming up with your own conclusions so in that respect it works well as a promo/character base...
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Post by Maniac on Aug 1, 2009 8:33:57 GMT -6
FRIGGIN AWESOME! Theres no real advice I can give you when you seem to have nailed this character perfectly, except for maybe what PAv said about dishing out some back story on both of these characters in the future.
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Post by adm on Aug 1, 2009 14:28:14 GMT -6
FRIGGIN AWESOME! Theres no real advice I can give you when you seem to have nailed this character perfectly, except for maybe what PAv said about dishing out some back story on both of these characters in the future. Basically same thing. I mean...you nailed him pretty well in the first couple rps, but backstory in the future could definitely help advance the chars and give us more insight into WHY he is what he is...nothing you need to do like next week or even next month...but for future thought. Karras is what Mordecai should have been...so sad the WWE never knows how to ****ing do that kind of gimmick.
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