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Post by Lance "The Icon" Ryan on Aug 11, 2009 17:26:32 GMT -6
Alright, so I know that the first one was likely not all that great, I need to get back into the swing of things. Please give me some feedback and constructive criticism
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Post by Joe Everyman on Aug 11, 2009 17:49:31 GMT -6
Rust my ass, that was great Lance. For not RPing for a while, and then just coming back and putting out an RP, it was really good. I'm almost afraid of what you have in store for me. P.S, you put Joe over as a heel very well
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Post by adm on Aug 11, 2009 18:41:18 GMT -6
If I had anything to say...shorten it up. I know it was under 2000 words but it did seem like longer. You spent a good deal of time talking about pre-nCw Lance...and nCw lance vs guys who have been there for at least part of it. Hammond and Ace know you, man...you don't need to give them your life story though you've been gone almost a year.
The promo stuff was the best, though. Stick to that kind of promo in the future, cutting down on the talk about your past which shall come with time, and you'll shave off that rust quickly.
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Post by Lance "The Icon" Ryan on Aug 11, 2009 20:09:36 GMT -6
The reason that I played up my past was because being thrown into a match with no angle after, what, six months at least? I went with the idea that Lance is into this match because it is like facing his former self. I will keep that down in the future for sure.
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Post by adm on Aug 11, 2009 20:19:51 GMT -6
The reason that I played up my past was because being thrown into a match with no angle after, what, six months at least? I went with the idea that Lance is into this match because it is like facing his former self. I will keep that down in the future for sure. Alright, I just didn't understand especially when it's guys who were around when you were last here is all.
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Post by Lance "The Icon" Ryan on Sept 7, 2009 16:50:28 GMT -6
Feedback would be loved on the first in my rising back to the top series against Joe Everyman.
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Post by Lance "The Icon" Ryan on Nov 10, 2009 17:12:27 GMT -6
Interested to see what people think of the ladder concept.
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Post by Will Washington on Nov 10, 2009 17:24:44 GMT -6
Thank god you're on my team. That was a pretty genius concept. It was gripping, and you managed to address all 8 men in the match. It was a great start to a week sure to be filled with promoey goodness.
The only problem was that you called me Cross once when you were talking about the middle era. Not a big deal, but just something I Noticed.
Pure promo brilliance.
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Post by Lance "The Icon" Ryan on Nov 21, 2009 0:25:54 GMT -6
Something VERY different for me. I felt that I needed something to put me over as capable of hurting Joe, Lance has been very clean since coming back. Joe gave me that in his last roleplay and I ran with it. This was a racy write for me, Id love to hear what people thought.
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Post by Joe Everyman on Nov 21, 2009 0:44:13 GMT -6
Lance, I have one word for your RP.
Yes.
I wrote my RP in hopes that it would give you something great, and you did it flawlessly. It was something very different, but sometimes, those are the best ones people do.
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Post by Lance "The Icon" Ryan on Feb 5, 2010 18:27:56 GMT -6
Alright, so I need some feedback. I have been tweeking anc changing things trying to find a good balance that is liked, so lemme know what you think. I wanna get back on top, so be critical if need be. I want to up my game to that point again.
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Post by Brad Kane on Feb 6, 2010 14:32:34 GMT -6
I've really enjoyed your work lately. Might be the only one but keep it up. You'll go places kid.
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Post by Lance "The Icon" Ryan on Nov 25, 2011 15:34:15 GMT -6
Rusty. Let me know what you think.
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Post by Lionheart on Nov 26, 2011 3:09:58 GMT -6
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