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Post by Malcolm Reed on Aug 14, 2009 7:36:30 GMT -6
I have a time line for this character, I have a clear idea of what direction this guy goes in, I was wondering what you guys thought of the rp? So I can make any necessary changes to my predetermined time lines?
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Post by adm on Aug 14, 2009 8:50:13 GMT -6
#1 try not to predetermine where the char is going CD wise...I've written myself into a wall a few times with Bates doing that.
On other note: Pretty solid rp, though I think you should go to the site and read or re-read the rules...drinking and driving in an rp, though not as BAD as killing someone, is still only doable if you show the consequences of such an action. Him getting arrested, having to pay fines, yadda yadda. You gotta be "realistic" here and having a camera catch a guy doing a DWI might not be the best route in the future.
Also I think there's quite a lot of CD here, that could have easily just been put into a developmental board rp. And with the drugs/possible murder thing you just gotta be careful where you go with this, again...go to the site and there's rules to read.
There's some good CD stuff, but...I don't see any match-related anything here to go from. Hopefully you can get up a 2nd that allows you to shoot on your opponent(s). Also....a little coding can go a long way to ease confusion about what is "description" and what is talking later on. There's a few breaks when he talks near the end and it doesn't read like descriptions but there are some shortly after so...maybe Italics or Bold or even just quotes around when he speaks.
There were good things going, just the lack of actual promo is making it hard to judge what to say to you about it.
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Post by Cliff Clinton on Aug 14, 2009 9:42:46 GMT -6
While CD storys are cool, never forget that your character is also a wrestler for a wrestling company.
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Post by Malcolm Reed on Aug 14, 2009 15:27:23 GMT -6
yeah guys I had read the rules I figured in a flashback/dream sequence the camera thing didn't matter, guess I was wrong.
I was planning doing another rp, when I wrote that I had not read the opponents rps yet
Thanks guys
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Post by Malcolm Reed on Aug 19, 2009 1:53:08 GMT -6
New rp feedback would be appreciated
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Post by Malcolm Reed on Aug 20, 2009 22:05:58 GMT -6
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Post by adm on Aug 20, 2009 23:03:41 GMT -6
Better than last week's rps, but to be honest the even way you space it and no distinction between who is really talking confuses me a bit. A little bit of coding can go a long way. Highlight sections of the rp, click on the code parts to help even it out or find a way to make the talking parts more obvious who is speaking by saying who is speaking.
That's the only real gripe about it, I saw some promo stuff as well as the CD stuff and it's looking pretty good aside from confusion as to who says what and when.
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