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Post by Tommy Victor on Aug 14, 2009 10:03:27 GMT -6
I'm looking for some feedback on my roleplays. Was wondering what you guys think of my first one.
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Post by Tommy Victor on Aug 21, 2009 0:46:53 GMT -6
Posted my first roleplay for the week here, and am probably going to get my second one in tomorrow afternoon.
I'm interested in seeing what I did wrong/right this time, because I've never done a joint story type of roleplay before. My second roleplay is going to continue the story with me meeting the Coach, and then cutting a long response promo against my opponents.
Any feedback would be much appreciated
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Post by Malcolm Reed on Aug 21, 2009 1:14:27 GMT -6
I really enjoyed your first rp of this week. I think what we have in store is really going to innovate tag team wrestling in effedding.
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Post by coreyshane on Aug 21, 2009 17:24:10 GMT -6
What little exposure I have had to efedding since Cousin Doe introduced me, I conclude that what you and Doe have done (And are planning to continue) is really innovative. This is your best tag team work, both of you guys.
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Post by Cameron Corvis on Aug 22, 2009 14:25:06 GMT -6
Just got done reading both roleplays.
I definitely liked them quite a bit. You gripped me into the story very quickly and that is always a good sign.
I really don't have a whole lot of bad to say, the roleplay was pretty solid. I really like the relationship between Victor and Doe, it is very interesting and I'm looking forward to seeing how it grows. I also like the relationship with Coach Emerson... likes Victor, but hates Doe. You can definitely play off that.
The only thing I can recommend to you would be the way you cut the promo. The first one in your car while you're freaking out over the whereabouts of Does... not sure if that was a perfect scenario to say, hey, I'm gonna talk about my career. And the other after waking up from a nightmare. What I'm getting at is try to make the promo flow within the roleplay. It almost seem's like you forced a promo in the CD stuff, just so you had it. Even if you have to completely cut a new scene... just try not to make it so cheesy/untimely.
That's all I have for you. Both were great reads though and I really like where this tag team is going. Lot's of stuff to work with.
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