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Post by adm on Jul 25, 2008 18:42:25 GMT -6
It was pretty interesting, though I wonder how far you are gonna take the voodoo thing. But...nice to see that someone besides Ace has beef with Knite. Good to have one sort of goal instead of "I wanna be champ!", cuz it sets up the character a bit better.
ANd the Hardy Pic Base...very interesting choice for a voodoo dude. I kinda woulda figured he'd be some Cajun guy lol
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Post by destroyyou555 on Jul 25, 2008 21:37:32 GMT -6
Where Wil lives, anyone who has colored hair, is considered weird and Voodoo Doll moron.
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Post by Angel on Jul 26, 2008 16:29:13 GMT -6
I liked it. Good first step at establishing yourself here. I cannot wait to see you in a match.
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Post by Jimmy Zane on Jul 28, 2008 9:54:01 GMT -6
Well, Trent is certainly right......being from Texas, we look at all colored haired freaks as freaks.... HA HA HA j/k I am actually considering changing the pic base.....but if I do, there is only one person and one character who can really match the deviousness Jimmy Zane possesses.... I have had titles.....and i have owned feds...... I am here to just have fun...have a good angle.... and take out some **** on Trent and Adam! We all have been fedding for 10 years together....so its good to be back!
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Post by Jimmy Zane on Jul 28, 2008 12:20:11 GMT -6
First roleplay of the week up...."MAGIC TRICKS"....
Feedback would be appreciated!!
Thanks
Wil
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Post by Chris Phere on Jul 28, 2008 12:42:57 GMT -6
First roleplay of the week up...."MAGIC TRICKS".... Feedback would be appreciated!! Thanks Wil I've seen a lot of your roleplays and not sure why you would ask for feedback on them accept wondering what people think about the character development. After reading what you said earlier in the shoutbox, your character development was excellent and fits with exactly the thing you are going for. As far as character development, this is the best rp I have ever seen you do with Jimmy Zane and I'm looking forward to seeing how things go for him. Good luck and have fun man!
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Post by Jimmy Zane on Jul 28, 2008 12:49:37 GMT -6
Thanks.... yeah its more on the side of development that I am looking for feedback on..
When I was the Punisher, I had my character down. I still feel like I am finding my way with Zane.
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Post by adm on Jul 30, 2008 18:35:22 GMT -6
The latest rp was a better than the first. I do have a few suggestions, you don't have to obey all of them.
1- Spell check usually works to take care of spelling errors, but you need to Read the rp VERY carefully so you catch anything the grammar check can sometimes miss. Doesn't always tell you when Thinking should be Think and such. 2 - You use a very interesting way to lay out your rps. I'm not saying it's wrong, but can get a bit distracting how it goes ::..SETTING..:: and such. It's just a personal preference, and if you like it how it is, keep it, cuz it does tell you what is what and keeps things neatly organized, perhaps a bit too neat. 3 - Though I didn't see any problems in this one, it's always a good idea to preview before you post not only to check if your color coding went through, but if the colors you use are readable. I've seen so many people who use hard to read colors for one person speaking and you gotta highlight it to read...plus it hurts your eyes with too much contrast. As I said, no problems in this one, but it's a good thing to keep in mind.
I look forward to seeing more from you in the future.
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Post by bane on Aug 1, 2008 5:13:19 GMT -6
thought it was damn good Wil
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Post by Jimmy Zane on Aug 10, 2008 19:02:38 GMT -6
I know it was really short.....but what did everyone think??
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Post by Angel on Aug 11, 2008 5:13:57 GMT -6
This weeks was the ****. I like the off the wall nature of your rps, and I honestly can't wait to face you at some point. Now... As I said I will give feedback only if I get feedback. YOU OWE ME CLOWN!
Your doing awesome with Zane by the way, never saw your work as Punisher.
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Post by Jimmy Zane on Sept 29, 2008 10:38:41 GMT -6
I know its short......but I think I got the point across......any suggestions? critiques?
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Post by Jimmy Zane on Oct 6, 2008 20:05:10 GMT -6
first RP up....any thoughts?
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Post by Davey Ortega on Oct 6, 2008 21:47:06 GMT -6
I liked it. I will definitly have something up for you soon sir
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Post by adm on Oct 8, 2008 11:36:09 GMT -6
Nice little rp you got there, hopefully you'll get a good match out of Ortega, cuz he really can give a helluva match.
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Post by Jimmy Zane on Oct 12, 2008 21:23:50 GMT -6
First Trauma RP is up.....
Any thoughts?
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Post by Chris Phere on Oct 12, 2008 21:42:21 GMT -6
I liked how you included everything and are really setting up possibly one of the greatest angles done in efed history. Will be interesting to see what exactly happens in your tag team match. Another great rp from one of the best in the game!
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Post by Jimmy Zane on Oct 17, 2008 11:18:46 GMT -6
2nd Trauma RP is up......thoughts? comments? anything? ? ;D
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Post by adm on Oct 17, 2008 22:05:21 GMT -6
Pretty good stuff, man. Hopefully we can face off someday. And hopefully you win your match.
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Post by Jimmy Zane on Oct 22, 2008 12:23:46 GMT -6
hey guys....first Collision RP of the week is up.....
ENJOY!
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Post by Chris Phere on Oct 24, 2008 12:10:06 GMT -6
LMFAO!!!!!! HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!! That 2nd rp of yours is by far the funniest and best roleplay I have EVER seen you do in the last 10 years man!
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Post by Jimmy Zane on Oct 27, 2008 11:42:37 GMT -6
First Mind Games RP is up!!
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Post by Jimmy Zane on Nov 1, 2008 5:56:02 GMT -6
Well, all 3 PPV RPs are up...not that I ever really get any feedback....but ya know the drill!!!
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Post by Jimmy Zane on Nov 8, 2008 11:35:17 GMT -6
Both RPs for this week's Collision are posted.....
Any thoughts? Suggestions? Comments?
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Post by Jimmy Zane on Nov 8, 2008 17:48:36 GMT -6
nothing???
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Post by Jimmy Zane on Nov 17, 2008 16:56:09 GMT -6
Not that I ever get any feedback....but first Collision RP of the week is up.
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Post by Spike Kane on Nov 18, 2008 17:46:14 GMT -6
It wasn't a bad roleplay sir, and it's good to see you so eager to get one up. A few things I wanna point out though; try not to use real wrestlers in your roleplay, by that I mean mentioning them like you did with Shaun Michaels and the Big Show. It takes away from the realism because in real life they'd never talk about wrestlers in another federation. On that note Pun isn't in the nCw Hall of Fame so the fact that he's in the NMW HoF means nothing here my friend. Sorry to sound so blunt and harsh, but some people will read that and not know about NMW and be like "WTF? Why he lie?" However it was a nice start to the week and I hope you get another one up
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Post by Philip Burns on Nov 19, 2008 3:45:17 GMT -6
A few things I wanna point out though; try not to use real wrestlers in your roleplay, by that I mean mentioning them like you did with Shaun Michaels and the Big Show. It takes away from the realism because in real life they'd never talk about wrestlers in another federation. unless youre in TNA, then you get extra points for talking about WWE guys!
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Post by Jimmy Zane on Nov 19, 2008 9:41:21 GMT -6
I have no idea what you are talking about, dude......
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Post by Spike Kane on Nov 19, 2008 10:09:12 GMT -6
meaning you took my advice and edited your roleplay
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