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Post by Simon Daye on Jun 23, 2010 16:53:54 GMT -6
I'm going to do it differently this time... I really didn't like that breaking it down into categories thing... or I didn't really like the categories. So I'm just going to review the RP as a whole without breaking it down individually. I'll still be giving out the scores.
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Post by Simon Daye on Jun 23, 2010 16:54:57 GMT -6
STEVE AWESOMEwww.ncw2k7rp.proboards.com/index.cgi?board=collision&action=display&thread=12933&page=1There isnt a thread for this week so I'm putting this in here. Tell me how it is Adam. --------------------------------------------Concept: 8/10 Storytelling: 9/10 Promoing: 9.5/10 Development: 8.5/10 Creativity: 8/10 Simon Factor Bonus: 3 Score: 92It was fantastic, nothing to complain about at all. Everything flowed, the McM part was funny, and the Steve and Kelly bit was perfect for the feud at hand, and then the stuff in the promo part was just... top notch. It was quite honestly the best RP I read from top to bottom during the entire week.
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Post by Alex Jones on Jun 24, 2010 17:32:38 GMT -6
ncw2k7rp.proboards.com/index.cgi?board=collision&action=display&thread=12944teh new AJ rp that everyone is waiting for --------------------------------------------Concept: 7/10 Storytelling: 8/10 Promoing: 10/10 Development: 8/10 Creativity: 6/10 Simon Factor Bonus: 3.5 Score: 85It was really well done again. Your strong point is really putting a lot of emotion into AJ's words. You can tell a whole story by what he says, by how strongly he feels about things without having to actually do a story part of a promo. There was just very little if anything to complain about. It's not a complaint as much as it's just an observation, but maybe try and spice things up with an occasional scene between Shelly and Alex, or few of Alex and Hayleigh again.
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JFK
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Sucks to be you.
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Post by JFK on Jun 24, 2010 18:02:19 GMT -6
ncw2k7rp.proboards.com/index.cgi?board=collision&action=display&thread=12942--------------------------------------------Concept: 9/10 Storytelling: 8/10 Promoing: 8.5/10 Development: 8/10 Creativity: 8/10 Simon Factor Bonus: 1 Score: 85I thought it was really good, it was definitely worthy of being in the main event and it was one of the best of the week. The bit of JFK sending Christina home because he thinks he's getting soft is cool since I think a lot of people including myself in the Knitelife column made mentions of JFK being very devoted to her, I mean that was just a great way to show a ton of emotion with one line. The promoing part felt a little cheap heelish at times, but overall it was done well.
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Post by Xavier Williams on Jun 24, 2010 19:23:50 GMT -6
ncw2k7rp.proboards.com/index.cgi?board=trauma&action=display&thread=12937--------------------------------------------Concept: 10/10 Storytelling: 7.5/10 Promoing: 8/10 Development: 8/10 Creativity: 6/10 Simon Factor Bonus: 2 Score: 83My favorite part about your RPs? They are easy to read, I can start one and not miss a single word because they flow well and keep your attention fantastically. I thought the things you said for this match were perfect, I loved how you made X seem like he wasn't concerned with what was going on between Adam and Steve but at the same time made it clear your fully understood and it didn't come off heelish in anyway when you were talking about it. I thought it was almost masterful how you did that.
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Post by The Golden Queen Cleopatra on Jun 24, 2010 21:34:55 GMT -6
ncw2k7rp.proboards.com/index.cgi?board=collision&action=display&thread=12946&page=1Let me know what you think. --------------------------------------------Concept: 6/10 Storytelling: 5/10 Promoing: 7/10 Development: 8/10 Creativity: 7/10 Simon Factor Bonus: 0 Score: 66One word..."long". And it felt long. You said a lot of good stuff, but honestly it seemed to me like you took two roleplays and spliced them together. I think it would of flowed a lot better if you would of cut out the bit dedicated to Zelda at the beginning and would of focused on the actual opponents in the match right off the bat. I think if it would of been a good deal shorter every category up there would of went up in score.
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Freakke
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Post by Freakke on Jun 25, 2010 11:23:34 GMT -6
ncw2k7rp.proboards.com/index.cgi?action=display&board=collision&thread=12950--------------------------------------------Concept: 7.5/10 Storytelling: 7.5/10 Promoing: 8/10 Development: 6/10 Creativity: 7/10 Simon Factor Bonus: 1.5 Score: 75It was good, there isn't much else to say. It was a solid RP that should win you a few matches here. The promoing was the strong point and it really carried this promo as it was done very well. You also had a good job of telling the whole story of Hexx and Hoppy chasing Freakke without having to spend a great amount of the promo actually showing it.
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Post by Daniel S. Hunter on Jun 26, 2010 1:47:15 GMT -6
ncw2k7rp.proboards.com/index.cgi?action=display&board=collision&thread=12958--------------------------------------------Concept: 8/10 Storytelling: 5/10 Promoing: 5.5/10 Development: 6/10 Creativity: 8/10 Simon Factor Bonus: 1 Score: 67It felt long, and it was honestly boring at points to where I just stopped reading and was skipping big chunks of it. The concept was really well thought out, I liked that you showed him as trying to get better, which is well done and your creativity was fantastic, you just need better execution, work on making everything flow together more and I think you'll be on your way to having some great success with this character.
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Post by Joe Everyman on Jun 26, 2010 12:22:14 GMT -6
ncw2k7rp.proboards.com/index.cgi?action=display&board=collision&thread=12962My Maria RP for this week. You said you didn't want me to let you down, so I thought I should post it instead of my Joe one. --------------------------------------------Concept: 8.5/10 Storytelling: 7/10 Promoing: 9.5/10 Development: 8.5/10 Creativity: 7/10 Simon Factor Bonus: 3 Score: 87Why can't you do this with Joe, every week? It was simple, it was straightforward and it felt like a promo. There was a nice touch of deliberate sillyness with the lesbian jokes, and there was a nice short to the point little story at the end. It wasn't amazing, but There was seriously nothing to complain about.
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