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Post by Deleted on Mar 11, 2011 16:35:39 GMT -6
Roxxie, the colour definately made your RP stand out a bit more and the speech was more discernable from the rest of the content which was great. Very small thing and maybe it i just me, but its like paragraphs, it just helps with the presentation.
Grammar could just do with a bit of a check up next time, but I try to look at the content itself rather than concentrate fully on grammar.
I liked how it was similar to a normal interview wrestlers attends with journalists pre-PPV whilst you still stayed in character, rather than going OOC. I enjoyed it and personally the Michael Cole bit didn't grate with me, but I was working on the presumption that the real world existed alongside this one hence why it doesn't seem to have done any harm.
It was a bit different, new location etc overally I'd say it was a good RP, needs a little bit of improvement here and there but generally not a massive problem. As you said, after weeks its some times hard to keep the creative juices flowing BUt the best cure is to just write, stopping really does more harm.
I still enjoyed the RP.
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Post by Deleted on Mar 12, 2011 18:28:11 GMT -6
Despite your pessimism I didn't think it was THAT bad at all. It has an interesting direction to go in regards Roxxxie's family life etc and I like that you've kept up with the colour.
It had some grammar issues, but not many and these again aren't the important part, it is the content. It was a little on the small side but I get the sense you were a little downhearted and having read your other RPs I know you can do better, but it wasn't as bad as you made out.
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Post by Amy Marshall on Mar 19, 2011 10:06:00 GMT -6
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Post by Deleted on Mar 19, 2011 14:20:18 GMT -6
A good RP Roxxxie, whilst it lackewd direct attacks on your opponents it made up for this with a good solid section of character building between you and Ander, which worked very well.
I loved the new layout with coloured speech amongst the descriptions, I thought it worked very well. Great work!
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Post by Amy Marshall on Apr 2, 2011 15:19:20 GMT -6
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Post by Deleted on Apr 2, 2011 15:39:29 GMT -6
I agree it wasn't your best RP but again I think sometimes you are a little harsh on yourself. It got the points across that it needed to make and flowed fairly well.
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Post by Amy Marshall on Apr 9, 2011 15:31:30 GMT -6
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Post by Deleted on Apr 9, 2011 18:50:12 GMT -6
Again it isn't AS bad as you make out Roxxxie, everybody can hit a rough patch and I am sure you will work through what you perceive yours to be.
It isn't as bad as you make out, could do with having more to it BUT it gets the job done.
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Post by Amy Marshall on Apr 16, 2011 4:24:48 GMT -6
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Post by Amy Marshall on Apr 16, 2011 17:14:21 GMT -6
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Post by Amy Marshall on Apr 17, 2011 7:05:17 GMT -6
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Post by Deleted on Apr 17, 2011 11:33:09 GMT -6
As I said in Trish's thread, you two work well togethyer it has been a good week watching both of you RP, yours were much better this week Jenny I must say after the past few, I think you're re-finding your form a bit.
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Post by Amy Marshall on Apr 20, 2011 13:11:03 GMT -6
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Post by Amy Marshall on Apr 30, 2011 12:42:14 GMT -6
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Post by Deleted on Apr 30, 2011 13:10:10 GMT -6
Good RP this week for Roxxxie, I enjoyed it.
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Post by Amy Marshall on May 4, 2011 11:52:47 GMT -6
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Post by Amy Marshall on May 22, 2011 3:20:13 GMT -6
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Post by Deleted on May 22, 2011 8:40:26 GMT -6
You can sometimes be quite critical of your RPs Jenny, not sure you were this week but I just wanted to say this RP was bang on for the match and flowed very well and it is clear that when you have the inspiration you can bring Roxxxies A Game.
Ironically you and Trish seem to have just clicked and worked well off of each other considering your respective characters differences. Both of your RPs were brilliant this week.
Top work Jenny!
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Post by Amy Marshall on May 28, 2011 12:06:07 GMT -6
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Post by Amy Marshall on Jun 3, 2011 6:18:41 GMT -6
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Post by Deleted on Jun 4, 2011 10:08:57 GMT -6
I want some SEX!
I really enjoy your interaction with Stephanie Sullivan this week, it ran smootly and flowed well and you captured both of their attitudes very well. It is great to see so many "Starlets" tag teams getting together and I think you two will work very well together.
I liked the way you two interacted in that "match", worked well.
Could have done with a bit more trash talking but the character building alone makes up for that and the ending make sme curious as to where this will be going. Good job!
EDIT - Small point, the font colour for each character speech seems to switch part way through, a minor point though!
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Post by adm on Jun 4, 2011 10:21:09 GMT -6
I second the font color thing Roberto said. I also must say that there are a few spelling/grammar errors that made me have to re-read lines about the Women's Tag titles a few times to finally work out which word was extra (there's an extra the in there I think). Sorry to be a grammar nazi, but it did distract me a little.
Overall it was a nice rp, though having just come back from a long hiatus, I have no real clue who your character is so it might take me a while to get up to speed.
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Post by Amy Marshall on Jun 4, 2011 11:25:15 GMT -6
Grammer is usually my main issue.
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Post by Amy Marshall on Jun 10, 2011 6:17:12 GMT -6
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Post by Amy Marshall on Jun 15, 2011 7:39:24 GMT -6
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Post by Amy Marshall on Jun 24, 2011 6:36:47 GMT -6
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Post by Deleted on Jun 24, 2011 7:41:39 GMT -6
A good solid first PPV RP, I enjoyed the interviews they worked well and the plague reference fit the city etc
I look forward to 2 and 3.
Also, grammar seemed pretty much spot on this time, no glaring errors or anything.
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Post by Amy Marshall on Jun 25, 2011 14:35:51 GMT -6
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