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Post by Deleted on Feb 28, 2011 23:15:47 GMT -6
OK I know absolutely nobody here, but as a former e-wrestling "vet" it'd be great to get to know you all have some feedback for my first set of RPs (considering I e-wrestled back when I was 14/15 and I am rolling up to my 25th year) as I am a little rusty, so please feel free to criticise constructively etc!
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Post by Deleted on Mar 2, 2011 22:29:47 GMT -6
Right, apologies it took a bit but I have managed to get my first RP done tonight! Please be as critical as you like, I am a little rusty after nearly a decade out of the game and am happy to take on board any advice you may have! As I am without a match I fancied diving straight in to my developmental RPs to explore a bit of his background prior to nCw so hopefully the more "direct" RPs make a little bit more sense! ncw2k7rp.proboards.com/index.cgi?action=display&board=develope&thread=15583&page=1#56023
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Post by Trish Newborn on Mar 6, 2011 15:44:31 GMT -6
I found it quite good, but there were a few places that need flushing out with a spell checker. Don't worry, it's not that bad. As I said, it was very detailed but just had a few errors in there that didn't seem right. Looking forward to seeing more from your character. And welcome to the fed!
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Post by Deleted on Mar 6, 2011 16:12:58 GMT -6
Cheers for the feedback Trish, thank you for the welcome, its nice to be back ewrestling! I will keep a beady eye on spelling errors for the next RP, I have a habit of writing late at night and my grammar etc can suffer a little!
I am hoping to keep a good blend of Developmental (as I prefer to keep his background seperate from match RPs) and Match RPs so watch out for both as they should make sense of why he is the way he is!
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Post by Deleted on Mar 9, 2011 11:41:04 GMT -6
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Post by Paul Star on Mar 9, 2011 12:17:49 GMT -6
Great RP, which is well written. You did a good job of insulting your opponents, along with a few other wrestlers and the whole NCW fanbase. You got your character across well, and he'll be hated . Keep up the good work, and you'll go far in NCW.
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Post by Deleted on Mar 9, 2011 14:22:45 GMT -6
Great RP, which is well written. You did a good job of insulting your opponents, along with a few other wrestlers and the whole NCW fanbase. You got your character across well, and he'll be hated . Keep up the good work, and you'll go far in NCW. Cheers Paul, the hate is always a good thing. Never tried playing "the heel" so it will actually be quite entertaining to be hated . As for the figure four leglock . Don't make me take a pop at Paul Star .
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Post by Paul Star on Mar 9, 2011 17:06:41 GMT -6
*blows Verona a kiss * I love ya really!
You do the self centered heel character very well.
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Post by Todd Williams on Mar 10, 2011 1:23:26 GMT -6
Very excellent rp Roberto, the rp was extremely well written and you play the part well. You been here for a short time and already you are catching on to certain characters and noticing the fed as a whole. Good stuff man, keep up the great work.
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Post by Deleted on Mar 10, 2011 12:25:45 GMT -6
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Post by Demetrious Young on Mar 10, 2011 13:26:50 GMT -6
Bury me at sea.
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Post by Steven Luke on Mar 10, 2011 13:43:55 GMT -6
Venom: yeah he does a damn fine job all around. he still uses some words that are improper grammer but it's easy to look over Manson: he has the descriptive skills I long for in describing a scene Venom: indeed Adam: he's going to go far if he keeps this up Venom: the verona kid is pretty damn good
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Post by Deleted on Mar 10, 2011 20:27:45 GMT -6
Thank you very much for that feedback, I am very much flattered! I certainly agree, my grammar definately needs a tune up and that is duly noted as I have a habit of missing some pretty obvious errors (My English Language A-Level really came in use....) when I write, I will certainly try and keep an eye out for those.
But I am very very humbled by all your comments, truly very greatful.
Cheers Demetrious, for what its worth I think its one of those difficult debuts when you put three unknowns in together, its always hard to gauge what to expect, fwiw I think your RPs are solid and certainly there's something there and some interesting ways to take your character.
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Post by Deleted on Mar 15, 2011 19:45:45 GMT -6
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Post by Trish Newborn on Mar 17, 2011 22:39:22 GMT -6
Really thought your rp this week was great. I liked the Q&A session part toward the end, it shows your character off well with Roberto's cocky attitude. Keep up the good work.
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Post by Demetrious Young on Mar 18, 2011 4:33:19 GMT -6
You manage to pull of a great heel character. For some reason I always get a Del Rio feel Verona (which is a good thing). Keep up the work and I don't see why you wouldn't get a nice push in the near future.
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Post by Deleted on Mar 18, 2011 20:06:22 GMT -6
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Post by Paul Star on Mar 19, 2011 7:30:30 GMT -6
Excellent second RP. You interacted well with the people asking questions, as well as the people who weren't. I really enjoyed the whole RP. Good work.
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Post by Deleted on Mar 23, 2011 10:52:11 GMT -6
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Post by Todd Williams on Mar 23, 2011 11:14:13 GMT -6
Dude your promoing is simply excellent. Like I can go into a full blown detailed explanation but I am not going to do that. The whole thing is great from beginning to end, it shows you been following what's going on and that's big stuff. Keep this stuff up man.
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Post by Deleted on Mar 23, 2011 12:15:29 GMT -6
Thanks Todd, it will be an interesting week to see if I can keep it all going whilst trying to have some originality, obviously always fearful of just repeating myself! Glad you enjoyed it.
Always feel free to go into full blown explanations, always helps me pinpoint what I am doing right and what I am doing wrong.
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Post by Trish Newborn on Mar 25, 2011 16:52:11 GMT -6
Yeah, the role-play this week was like always. I really thought it was very well done, and it should be an interesting, intense match between Todd and Roberto. And I look forward to seeing a feud maybe happen somewhere down the line between you two.
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Post by Clint Renner on Apr 15, 2011 15:36:38 GMT -6
I give it Seven Loads out of Ten
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